Lieutenant
Bask walked briskly down the cold hallway of the space station. A few other
officers passed her by, but she didn’t even notice them. Her eyes were locked
on the tablet in her hands as she swiped through recent status reports. Bask
already knew the latest data wouldn’t provide any hope. The fear and dread
really began to sink in. Had humanity finally run out of time? Bask shook her
head in an attempt to empty her head of those thoughts. This was not the time
to lose focus.
A red warning flashed across her tablet screen.
She tapped it lightly and brought up the message: Barrier breached. Impact t-minus 10 minutes. Bask’s eyes bulged in
shock. So many questions raced through her head. Shouldn’t they still have a
few days left to finish preparations? So many people still remained on Earth,
how would they evacuate everyone? She had to get to Admiral Cross immediately.
Bask broke off into a dead sprint.
Outside the space station was a field of
enormous steel rings as long and wide as a football stadium. Hundreds of small
maintenance ships with workers tethered to them in space suites hovered around
the rings making final preparations. The scientists called them Gateways to the
Cosmos. The only problem with humanities last hope was the scientists had only
theorized about the functionality of the gateways. They didn’t have the time
available to complete and test one; they just had to trust it they would work.
Earth and humanity faced an impending doom coming at them from all angles. Below
the surface of the Earth bubbled a raging storm waiting to explode beneath
their feet. Some people felt they could figure out a solution, but even if they
did what was heading for them from the dark edges of the galaxy would destroy
them anyway.
Above the Earth several massive space
stations floated in its orbit; each one housing thousands of smaller docked space
ships. In the central station Admiral Cross stood on the viewing deck of the
bridge with his hands placed behind his back as he watched the final modifications
on the gateways. He couldn’t help but wonder what events had actually brought humanity
to this impossible situation. The gateways symbolized a leap of faith. Cross
and his team had been persuasive enough to convince Earth’s leader this was the
only viable option. There was no way to know if his plan would actually work,
but he knew someone had to provide a solution, and he was the only one who
stepped forward with a viable, although only theorized, solution. The seed had
been planted and nourished by Cross and he had watched it grow until the
leaders trusted him. Not all of humanity believed in the danger lurking below
the Earth and in the darkness of space, but there were enough people that did,
and if these gateways worked, humanity would live to fight another day.
The doors to the bridge opened and Lieutenant
Bask ran through the entrance, stopping a few feet shy of Cross. “Sir,” she
paused to catch her breath, “we have run out of time.” Cross turned to face her.
“Here sir, look for yourself.” She shared her screen with the main bridge
display. Cross studied the information on the screen with a look of concern.
“This can’t be right? Our intel said we had at least three days to finish.”
“I’m not sure sir, but we have to move up
the launch.”
Admiral Cross stared at Bask for a moment.
There was no time to second-guess his plan now. It was time for action. Cross whirled
around on his heels and barked orders to his crew, “Call back the maintenance
ships. If a gate is not ready, notify the ships affected and assign them to the
closest gateway that is completed. Send a message to all crews and pilots and
tell them to board their ships. Once the crews are ready we’ll advise all
passengers to board. Communicate to the ground crews one Earth to ready the
remaining ships and have them launch as soon as possible.” Cross knew it was
time to take that leap.
Powell watched his monitor to make sure
he kept the ship a safe distance from the gateway allowing his crew enough room
to work. His intercom cracked with static and a dispatcher came across his headset,
“RR-37, pull your crew back in. Debris has breached the shield and is heading
our way. I repeat, pull in your crew.” Powell pushed down the intercom button
and replied in his southern accent, “Copy command. Reeling them in now.” Powell
couldn’t believe it. Even though he had been stuck above the planet for two
years working on the gateways he couldn’t grasp that they were about to turn
them on and travel where no human being had ever been. His thoughts were
interrupted by another communication from command, “Once your crew is on board
pull back to the safe point. Once The Maiden has entered the gateway safely,
you may then proceed to your designated gateway and order in the line.” “Copy.”
He flipped another switch to talk with his crew. “Team, looks like we’re done piddling
around. We’re fixin’ to see if this voodoo science actually works.”
Outside of RR-37 the three crewmembers slowly
floated back towards the ship as their tethered lines were reeled back in.
Without warning a massive piece of space debris slammed into one of the crewmembers,
ripping him from his tether and hurdling him into space.
CRACK! Another piece of debris slammed
into the command deck observation window. A red warning light erupted, followed
by a siren. A spider-web crack quickly spread across the section of glass.
Cross barked an order to his crew, “Seal that section before it shatters!” A metal panel slid down over the broken section.
Cross knew destruction waited for them, but even now he feared that his actions
were too late.
From the Earth below an enormous
explosion erupted across the European Continent. “Sir!” cried Bask, pointing
her finger to the rear-viewing window. Cross spun around on his heals and an
expression of horror consumed his face. Even though was afraid they may be
doomed anyway, he remained calm and asked, “How many of the gateways are
completed?” “Ninety-five percent of them, sir!” Without hesitation Cross moved
to the closest control panel. His fingers moved across the hologram keyboard at
lightning speed. As he typed in the last key in the coded sequence red warning
lights began to flash in every inch of every station.
In the main stations cafeteria small
groups of people were gathered around the tables. The red strobe lights painted
the room in a grim scene. A look of panic quickly spread across each person’s
face. A booming voice sounded across the ship PA system, it was Cross. “Attention
everyone. The time has come. Please head directly for your designated ships.
All ships will launch in 20 minutes.”
Back on Earth ships littered the
tarmac of Heathrow Airport. The warning lights atop their posts bathed the
scene in a red despair. A sea of people poured out from every entrance of the
surrounding buildings and sprinted across blacktop towards their waiting ships.
In the massive crowd a little boy stopped, realizing he’d been separated from
his father. He cried out in terror. A hand reaches out and snagged the
screaming child by the arm just before he was trampled by the stampede. It was
his father. He pulled his son into a quick embrace and fell back into the flow
of the crowd heading to the ships.
The ground shook and knocked everyone off
balance. A massive crack appeared and an explosion erupted from below. Several
of the ships were swallowed up by the large crevasses created by the
earthquake. Several groups of people disappeared into the blackness below with
the ships. Screams erupted from every direction. Mass hysteria had firmly taken
over.
Inside the cockpit of one of the
ships the pilots flips a switch and outside the engine roars to life. The pilot
yelled to his co-pilot over the rumblings of the ground below, “We don’t have
time to wait for everyone to board. We have to close the doors now.” The
co-pilot shook his head in desperate agreement and closed the doors. The co-pilot
pressed down the call button, “We’re taking of now. Hold on.” Passengers in the
cabin of the ship dive for any open chair. Some were able to secure themselves
into the seat while others firmly gripped their seat. The ship lifted up of the
ground and blasted upwards toward the clouds. The surviving ships followed.
Above the Earth on his ship The
Maiden, Cross watched as hundreds of thousands of ships exited the Earth’s
atmosphere. He turned to Bask and asked, “How long until the portals are
ready?” Bask looks down at one of the monitors and replied, “Only a matter of
moments sir.”
Another huge piece of space debris
barrels towards a group of ships. Boom! Three ships exploded on impact.
Cross covered his eyes to protect them
from the sudden burst of light from the explosion. Quickly recovering he looked
back at Bask and snarled, “Get the damn things on!”
The rings surged to life with
electricity crackling inside them and points of energy darting towards the
center. As the energy connected the space that was once transparent has become
a wall of brilliant white light.
Cross took one last look at the
Earth below. It was a sight to behold. Every continent had been shattered into
pieces. It looked like puzzle pieces ready to be ripped apart. He turned away
and focused on the gateway in front of him. Cross said a silent prayer, God help us all, before he gave a solemn,
last command, “Commence.” The Maiden’s thrusters burst into full force and
after a moment’s hesitation, the ship accelerated towards the gateway. The nose
of the ship disappeared into the energy field and a bright light exploded,
consuming The Maiden.
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This is my first time sharing any of my writings and would love to hear your feedback. I'm excited to continue the story of the Archivist Chronicles: Part I. Please make sure to check back next week on Friday, July 13 for the continuation of The Archivist Chronicles with the release of Chapter 1.
This is my first time sharing any of my writings and would love to hear your feedback. I'm excited to continue the story of the Archivist Chronicles: Part I. Please make sure to check back next week on Friday, July 13 for the continuation of The Archivist Chronicles with the release of Chapter 1.
I am curious to read the next chapter. A compelling start and I need to know more. Two suggestions to consider. Keep the tense consistant. I noticed a couple times switching back and forth between past and present. "Another huge piece of space debris 'barrels' towards a group of ships. Boom! Three ships 'exploded' on impact." I thought I saw present progressive in there too but dont remember where.
ReplyDeleteSecondly, when transitioning to a different place or perspective, display some sort of break in the text to indicate another place, time or perspective. It helps slow of wit readers like me.
I like the setting though and the experience they are having would be quite intense. Try to show that a bit more. I didnt experience enough of their anxiety and fear. I could see it but I didnt quite feel it if that makes sense.
I write too and find things like this in my own stuff even after multiple revisions. I hope I'm not critical but just helpful.
But you have my attention which is the ultimate mark of quality writing. I want to read more and cant wait to see where this is going. I have no clue what to expect, which is how it should be.
Darin - Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. The tense is something I catch myself all the time. I am used to writing screenplays and I'm having to switch my brain to novel format. And thank you for taking the time to read this.
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